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Carrying on

She sits on a bench, thinking of him. She suppresses her grief as a mild breeze traces the contours of her face, reminding her of his touch. “I’m not giving in. I’m stronger than this,” she whispers, while the traffic moves on the bridge overhead, the cacophonous roar of engines and horns evoking some memory she thought she’d burnt, until emotion and thinking crescendo and embrace at an apogee of shattered whys, and broken hows. “Please…” she says, and then heaves. “Ple… as… e…” she chokes, and something wild and unmanageable explodes within, turning everything without monochrome while she weeps. 

Image © Roger Bultot

For Friday Fictioneers


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  1. The Creative Chic Avatar
    The Creative Chic

    I just don’t even know what to say about this. It’s just so sad and beautiful. Goodness.

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    1. Justawriter Avatar
      Justawriter

      Thank you so much for your kind words my friend.

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  2. neilmacdon Avatar
    neilmacdon

    None of us are as strong as we pretend. Welcome to Friday Fictioneers.

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    1. Justawriter Avatar
      Justawriter

      Very true. And thank you so much!

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  3. Dawn M. Miller Avatar
    Dawn M. Miller

    Very emotional.

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    1. Justawriter Avatar
      Justawriter

      Thank you very much.

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  4. Liam Avatar
    Liam

    A sad tale.

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    1. Justawriter Avatar
      Justawriter

      Thank you.

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  5. Iain Kelly Avatar
    Iain Kelly

    A tortured soul.

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    1. Justawriter Avatar
      Justawriter

      Definitely. Grief can eat people alive.

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  6. Keith's Ramblings Avatar
    Keith’s Ramblings

    Such a sorrowful tale. The grey bench in the photograph sits perfectly with your final few words.

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    1. Justawriter Avatar
      Justawriter

      Thank you very much for the kind comment.

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  7. plaridel Avatar
    plaridel

    i feel sorry for her. it looks like it comes to the point where she needs professional help.

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    1. Justawriter Avatar
      Justawriter

      Yeah. Grief can really get to people sometimes. Destroy them completely. Thanks for the comment.

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  8. Dale Avatar
    Dale

    Grief is a difficult thing…

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    1. Justawriter Avatar
      Justawriter

      Yeah. It definitely is. Thanks for the comment.

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  9. Laurie Bell Avatar
    Laurie Bell

    Wow. Heartbreakingly good intense emotion here. True breaking heart in real time. Very well done.

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    1. Justawriter Avatar
      Justawriter

      Thank you so much for your kind words.

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  10. Bill Avatar
    Bill

    Very emotional. Carry on.

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    1. Justawriter Avatar
      Justawriter

      Thank you.

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  11. Rowena Avatar
    Rowena

    Beautifully written and so poignant and sad.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

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    1. Justawriter Avatar
      Justawriter

      Thank you very much Rowena.

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  12. rochellewisoff Avatar
    rochellewisoff

    Dear Justawriter,

    Welcome to Friday Fictioneers. The emotion in this piece is tangible.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Justawriter Avatar
      Justawriter

      Thank you so much Rochelle

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  13. Tannille Avatar
    Tannille

    I can imagine the choking on grief. Well done. 😀

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    1. Justawriter Avatar
      Justawriter

      Thank you

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  14. Sandra Avatar
    Sandra

    Grief can be like that, like an incoming giant wave which sends you flying.

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    1. Justawriter Avatar
      Justawriter

      Very true. Thank you for commenting.

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  15. msjadeli Avatar
    msjadeli

    As George Harrison sang, “Beware of darkness,” best not to dwell there too long… I feel bad for this person who is caught there.

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    1. Justawriter Avatar
      Justawriter

      Yes agreed. This sadly happens very often though, and sometimes it’s beyond our control, methinks.

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  16. Nan Falkner Avatar
    Nan Falkner

    Jeepers – so sad! Nicely done.

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    1. Justawriter Avatar
      Justawriter

      Thank you very much

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